Bella Brown was having a very bad day. She was upset with her friends Meg and Amy. Ariel entered her room and said “Bella you look sad, what about a picnic tomorrow with Mrs Snow and Aunt Polly at Aunt Polly’s place.”
“Not with Aunt Polly she is very rude and careless. Her five years son is even worse. Caroline her daughter would make me mad with the talk of Hollywood film stars and films. Her husband would make me feel like going for a suicide. He is also like Polly.”She replied. “Ok so what are your plans tomorrow?” Ariel asked
Suddenly someone rushed in to the waiting room. Bella and Ariel went to the waiting room. The lady was panting and struggling to breathe. Ariel brought a glass of juice for the lady. They lady stopped panting and said “I am Veronica wife of Mr Thomas Hunter.”
“Thomas hunter the great businessman who died three days ago because of heart attack”
“ Yes but I suspect that it was a murder because the day he died he was looking very depressed and was saying I am leaving you forever Veronica. If I am lucky then I can meet you in the heaven. Goodbye. Moreover he was a healthy person no chance of a heart attack.”
Veronica continued. “It sounds more like a suicide than a murder whatever I would try my best. Can I have your visiting card please? It may be needed for investigation.”Bella said. Veronica handed over her visiting card to Bella.
Veronica left.
Bella rushed to her father’s office. She discussed the case with her father. Her father promised to help her in the case. They first went to the hospital where Mr Thomas Hunter was being treated. They went to meet the doctor who was treating him. The doctor said that he had recovered from illness but suddenly he had a heart attack.
“Suddenly, but when?”
“Between 9:30 and 10:00 am. During our breakfast break.”
“Can you tell me more?”
“Yes during the break all doctors lock the cabins and go to eat. The main doctor and nurse of the cabin have the key.”
“I couldn’t understand it.”
“Every cabin has one doctor and one nurse who only take care of the patients in that particular cabin. For example the doctor and nurse of cabin no 81 will take care of the patients who are being treated in cabin no 81. So the doctor and nurse will only have the key of cabin no 81.”
“Now I can understand. Who is the doctor of the cabin where Mr hunter was being treated?”
“The name of the doctor is Ron and the name of the nurse is Diana.”
“Okay thank you.”
“Dad I can handle the case now. You should go to your office now. Remember the meeting dad.”
“Yes Bella. You have a good memory.”
“Okay dad. Wish me luck.”
“Good luck Bella.”
Bella went to the reception and ask about Ron and Diana. Ron was out of station and Diana was in the hospital. Bella wanted to meet Diana. A meeting was arranged for them.
“Diana how is Veronica according to you?”
“Very good, she cared for her husband a lot”
“How can you tell so?”
“During our breakfast break she took the key to see her husband”
“Why only during break?”
“I think because she was busy during the rest of the day.”
“Oh Veronica used to visit him very frequently?”
“Yes, very frequently. She cared for him a lot. I told you.”
“Every day during the breakfast break.”
“No, but she did so only for one days.”
“When did Mr Hunter die?”
“25th march five days before at 9:54 am.”
“Did Veronica visit him that day?”
“No the previous day.”
“Do you have CCTV camera?”
“Yes madam in every cabin.”
“Can you show me the recording of 25th march?”
“Yes madam come to your reception .”
“Thanks.”
After a few minutes Diana informed that the CD is missing of that day only.
Bella came back home.
She called up Veronica.
“Hello Veronica.”
“Hi Bella. What about my case?”
“I want to investigate your house.”
“When?”
“Now.”
“Oh now I am out for some work. I will ask my servant to show you the rooms.”
Bella arrived at the investigation venue. She went to Veronica’s room. Everything was scattered all around. She found a soap cake only. She was about to leave the room when she saw a briefcase.
“What is this?” Bella asked the servant
“Madam said that it has some clothes that she wants to give to the orphanage.”
“Can I take it.”
“You must ask madam.”
“Okay I am replacing it with an ordinary suitcase. Do not tell madam. If she asks tell you do not know anything. If you do this I will give you 200 dollars.”
“Yes madam.”
She went back home. She went back home and kept those on her table. The cake of soap had a hole which was of the shape of a key. The suitcase contained a dress of a nurse who worked in the hospital along with an injection.
Next day Bella went to the hospital and asked for the key of the cabin where Mr hunter died. The key fitted perfectly in the hole of the soap.
Bella was sure of the criminal but still she wanted to know who stole the CCTV recording. She went to the police station to meet her father who worked as a police inspector there.
A man was being badly beaten.
“Dad what has he done?”
“ He steals small things like cd, pen drive, ring etc. He has stolen a cd from the ABC hospital.”
“ABC hospital where Mr. Hunter was being treated.”
“Yes”
“Can I see it.”
“Surely.”
The cd was the recording of CCTV camera of 25th march.”
The police, Veronica and Mr hunter’s sister Emily were called.
“Bella have you caught the thief.” Veronica asked
“Yes madam it is you.”
“Why are you joking.?”
“I am not.”
“Oh .”
“Tell the truth.”
“I would not.”
“Dad shoot her.”
“No I will tell.”
“I killed my husband. I took the key from Diana and took its print in soap. I made another key. I bought a dress of the nurse from a shop and entered the hospital. I went in during the breakfast break and entered an empty injection in his body. I knew it would kill him. Then I asked a thief to steal the CCTV recording.”
“Why did you kill him?”
“He decided to make a will and give all the money to Emily. I wanted the money. Luckily before signing the will he suffered an attack. I was happy but I did not know he would recover so I killed him.”
“If you are the culprit then why did you come to register a case?”
“So that no one suspect me?”
The police recorded it and Veronica was sent to jail for life time.
Comments (3 so far )
Now having said that I would like to take the high road in advance and apologize to you, for I am now going to point out some major mistakes( I'll leave out the minor ones for you to figure out.).
First of all- Bella Brown is not a celebrity (at least not one that I know.), so a little intro stating that she is a nancy drew-ish famous investigator would have been helpful. For half the story I was confused why the wife of a famous businessman would run to a teenage girl to investigate her husband's death instead of going to the police or a private investigator.
Secondly the wife orcastrating her husband's murder and then leaving evidence laying down in her bedroom and on top of that allowing the investigator to search it in her absence.... that doesn't sound believable.
Thirdly, bella ordering her father to 'kill her' and the wife just breaking down.... that's a tad too much for realistic fiction( and no I don't consider CID's 'Daya tod do darwaaza' or Daya slapping the culprit and the culprit immediately spilling the beans as realistic on any level!).
And finally, "I gave him an empty injection. I knew it would kill him."... o.0.... is that even possible?!
Lastly I would again like to apologize if I sound too rude or critical. I just thought that you would like to know.
And please continue writing. We need more people like you on this site who dare to attempt a mystery/fiction.